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Thursday, 7 July 2011

EmpolePhlotion by JD Coi

Thanks to my friend JD Coi for sharing the prologue to his story, EmpolePhlotion.

Empole was an average nine year old boy, living an average boy’s life in the smallish town of Petersburg. It was a regular day in Petersburg. The sun was shining, and squirrels were chasing each other up the trees, but Empole could tell that something wasn’t right.

He was walking to the park where he was going to meet his friend, Nick, when he saw something shining in the grass. When he stepped closer, it looked like a red ball, but it was glowing with a weird light.

He should have been smarter than to bend over and touch it when he didn’t know what it was, but it was too late to think about should-haves. When he picked it up, he felt the rush of a strange power coursing through him. He dropped it suddenly, but when he looked down at his hand, his fingers were gone! Instead, he had three arrows jutting out from his arm—an arm that was no longer that of a scrawny nine-year old, but something…else.

“Cool,” said Empole. It might be fun to pretend to be someone else for the day. Although, he hoped whatever this costume was, would wash off later.

He looked up and saw Nick approaching. His friend screamed, not knowing that the beast in the park was Empole.

Empole raised his arrow hands and said, “Wait, it’s me. Nick, don’t be scared, it’s just me, Empole.”

Nick squinted. “Are you sure?”

“Yes, of course. Can’t you tell?”

“Well, you look a little different, but if you say so. Okay.” Nick walked forward. “What is that red orb on the ground?” He pointed a few feet away.

Empole and Nick examined the orb, but both agreed not to touch it.

“Did you touch it? Is that how this happened to you?” asked Nick.

“Yes,” answered Empole. “But watch.” And Empole closed his eyes. After a minute, he opened them and saw the surprise on Nick’s face. “Did I turn back?”

“You sure did. That’s a cool trick.”

Then the two boys left the ball on the grass in the park and went to Empole’s house to play videogames. When they got home Empole asked Nick, “Do you want to play Pokemon?”

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“Yes” answered Nick.

After they had played a hundred battles, Empole’s mom called, “Time for dinner!”

Empole asked Nick if he wanted to stay for dinner, and of course, Nick thought that was a great idea so he called his mom and ended up planning to stay the whole night. When dinner was finished the two boys watched the movie Clash of the Titans, and then when the movie was over they went to sleep.

Thanks JD. Send some more!


  1. This is a terrific story starter, JD. I can't wait to find out what the red orb is all about. Is it an alien thing? Is it magic??

  2. Yes, please, JD, send some more! I want to read what happens next!

  3. Great story, JD! We're eager to see what happens next. :)

  4. I love it, JD! And now I kind of want to watch Clash of the Titans.

  5. We've had some trouble and haven't been able to comment, but in case this works JD wanted to say thank you to Jet and everyone who commented